Screenwriting, script editing, feedback & story services

Hi there. I’m Brooke Hemphill, an experienced and passionate screenwriter and script editor.

The first-ever Australian writer to attend Meryl Streep-supported lab intensive, The Writers Lab, I have a post-grad in Screenwriting from the Australian Film TV and Radio School (AFTRS) and a Bachelor of Visual and Performing Arts from the Victorian College of the Arts (VCA).

For the past decade, I have been writing and helping to develop film & TV projects.

A reader for The Writers Lab and a former reader for the Finish Line Screenwriting Competition, I have a deep knowledge of screenwriting structure, character, formatting and how to make a script jump off the page.

I am available for script rewrites, coverage, feedback, editing and story consultation.

Script and story services

Topline feedback – feature script

Two pages of notes on your feature script covering concept, story, structure, tone and formatting. Get an idea of what is working and what needs work before you launch into your next draft.

$300* AUD for 120 pages or less

Add a 30-minute Zoom call to discuss the notes for $30*
Extra $1* per page for every page over 120 pages

*Plus 10% GST for Australian orders

In-depth feedback – feature script

Four pages of notes on your feature script, including concept, story, structure, tone and formatting. I’ll go deep on your character arcs, relationships and theme with some suggestions on how to strengthen them in your next draft.

$500* AUD for 120 pages or less

Add a 30-minute Zoom call to discuss the notes for $30*
Extra $1* per page for every page over 120 pages

*Plus 10% GST for Australian orders

In-depth feedback – 30 min pilot

Four pages of notes on your half-hour pilot script covering concept, story engine, structure, tone and formatting. Get an idea of what is working and what needs work before you launch into your next draft.

$300* AUD

Add a 30-minute Zoom call to discuss the notes for $30*

*Plus 10% GST for Australian orders

In-depth feedback – 1-hour pilot

Four pages of notes on your 1-hour pilot covering concept, story engine, structure, tone and formatting. Get an idea of what is working and what needs work before you launch into your next draft.

$400* AUD

Add a 30-minute Zoom call to discuss the notes for $30*
*Plus 10% GST for Australian orders

Feature or pilot rewrite

Don’t have time to tackle your rewrite? Want to hand over the reins to someone else? I can help with that. Whether you’re a writer or a producer, I can work with you to reshape a TV pilot or feature. Get in touch - I can’t wait to hear all about your project.

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What people are saying

“Brooke has the rare ability to take the 20,000-foot overview and really understand the heart of a project. Once she zeros in on what the project needs, she checks her ego and emotions at the door and jumps into the work. Her ability to massively overhaul and turn around a draft, while also making it smarter, funnier, and just better, is a true gift. She brings characters into the story in such a credible and engaging way, she has a great feel for pacing and tone, and she’s incredibly thoughtful when it comes to themes and audience.”

Producer Sheila Hanahan Taylor

– Sheila Hananhan Taylor, producer of Final Destination, Oddball and American Pie

“Brooke is an amazing human. She is a truth teller with an exceptional radar for authenticity. She is empathetic and super funny. Her work as a writer is lean, clear and compelling. Her work as a developer is equally so. She has a sharp mind that understands patterns and interrogates with care for the work. She simply wants the work and the writer to be better.”

Producer and screenwriter Stephen Davis

– Stephen Davis, producer & screenwriter

“Brooke’s genuine curiosity makes for the best feedback - she has never failed to scratch the what-else-does-this-need itch. She has such a keen eye for character development and asks questions that have me thinking and re-thinking for weeks. I feel like she sees my characters more clearly than I do! Brooke also has great (and seemingly endless) book and podcast recommendations. I thoroughly enjoy our conversations and admire her natural ability to encourage creative exploration.”

Actress and emerging writer Josie Waller

– Josie Waller, actor and emerging writer

My projects

  • Apotcalypse by Brooke Hemphill

    Apotcalypse

    Comedy feature (90 mins)

    When a fully cooked zombie apocalypse pops off, a perma-baked barmaid and her doofus ex-BFF are forced out of their rut and onto the road where they blaze a pot-fuelled trail across the country, saving the family pub, their friendship and the world.

  • TERATOMA

    TERATOMA

    Body horror feature (90 mins)

    Perennial good girl Maxine's dead bedroom is the least of her problems when the medspa treatment that was supposed to fix her sexual desire provokes a murderous monster inside her – a sentient uterine tumour that shoots out from between her legs and murders people who make her feel shame.

  • Kidless by Brooke Hemphill

    Kidless

    8 x 30 min comedy series

    Sliding Doors meets Catastrophe when, on her 40th birthday, a childfree children's entertainer wakes up in a world where she gave up her career to support her narcissist husband and raise their five kids.

  • Photo by <a href="https://unsplash.com/@sotti?utm_content=creditCopyText&utm_medium=referral&utm_source=unsplash">Shifaaz shamoon</a> on <a href="https://unsplash.com/photos/woman-lying-on-brown-sand-during-daytime-XujShJrrmCM?utm_content=creditCopyT

    The Island

    8 x 30 min dramedy series

    When Lori scores a job at an exclusive island resort in far north Queensland, she discovers a tangled web of dirty secrets. To protect herself, she sets out to uncover the island's hidden truths. But she can only hide behind other people's secrets for so long before she has to face her own.

Frequently Asked Questions

  • I offer script consultation services, including story analysis, feedback and rewrites for TV and feature scripts and screenplays.

  • Congratulations on finishing your script. That’s an epic achievement. Give yourself a well-deserved pat on the back. If you want to make your script the best it can be, the next step is to get feedback. Don’t know anyone who can read your work? Do not fear! I can help with that. I’d love to read your script and give you guidance on how to make it even better.

  • I have a Post Grad in Screenwriting from the Australian Film TV and Radio School (AFTRS) and have read hundreds of scripts as a reader for the Finish Line screenwriting competition and The Writers Lab. I’ve spent the last decade honing my writing and story skills and have several of my own projects in development.

  • Having been on the receiving end of some BRUTAL feedback, I know how important giving kind, constructive feedback is. It took blood, sweat and tears to get it to this point, and I fully respect that. That doesn’t mean I’m going to blow smoke up your bum hole. If your script needs work, I’m going to tell you. But I’m going to do it in a way that makes you excited to tackle the rewrite.

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I’d love to work with you

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